Fandom: | Hard Target (1993) |
A John Woo Action movie with Van Damme as the hero, the story focuses on the two bad guys played by Arnold Vosloo (Pik) and Lance Hendrisken (Emil) | |
Characters: | Pik Van Cleaf, Emil Fouchon |
Pairings: | Pik Van Cleaf / Original Female Character |
Rating: | Mature |
Summary: | Pik ends up on a road trip with Sandrine Mosley, a soon 18-year old girl who may or may not be Fouchon's daugther. Although Pik is a professional, he is also a sadistic killer and his hostage intrigues him. |
Notes:
This is a rewrite of the same story I wrote 10 years ago. I always knew I needed to overhaul it and now I am doing it. It is becoming much more explicit. The word count is rising and that with about the same stuff happening as before. However, I do try to reflect more on why Sandrine acts the way she does by bringing up how her relationship with her father influenced her. I also made things a bit steamier, by including a few fantasies from Pik about her which go into non-con territory. I also want to make it clearer that she becomes attracted to Van Cleaf even though or maybe because he scares her.
Things that might turn a beta reader off:
- awkward sentence structure
- misuse of words (I am not a native speaker)
- age difference (she is almost 18 and he is closer to 40)
- Pik fantasizing about raping the OC (which I can leave out, I need a M version for ff.net anyway)
- sexual tension often bordering on sexual assault
- one count of definite sexual assault (clothes cutting, breast touching)
- sex with dubious consent (not recommend for people triggered by sexual assault)
- bondage and spanking
- people being beaten up
- people being shot
- one count of torture (tied to a chair, beated up with fists)
- long chapters
- long story over 50k
I am just happy if I find anyone to work on the spelling and fix awkward phrases (or just tell me which sentences are really in need of fixing)
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